Monday, April 12, 2010

A paragraph from my draft, Essay # 1

Below i have my whole Introduction paragrapgh and at the end of it i have mentioned what i believe are my strengths and weaknesses and how i can improve or make more striking my introduction.

For the majority of companies, a well defined vision and mission is crucial for a future profitability success. The issue that concerns the most is the idea of maximizing a company’s profit regardless any moral or ethical consideration. Wal-Mart Company has become one of the most powerful retailers and private employers in The United States. Many disputes have emerged from the media causing controversy in the American society, in a specific field, Wal-Mart’s Customers or potential targets. Some people say that Wal-Mart is a company that has always been careless about its employee’s rights; with facts some support what they say. For example, Wal-Mart employees are forced to sign a pre employment agreement as a condition of accepting a job. This agreement requires employees to give up many rights as to bring a lawsuit against the employer for anything wrong done to the employee by the employer. It is a legal and an ingenious way to prevent a company in this case Wal-Mart, from any situation that can lead to a lawsuit. However, from my personal opinion, looking at it from a moral perspective not a right decision to be taken. On the other hand, some people say that Wal-Mart has become more than a convenient retailer super store for its consumers, with such “everyday low prices”, has also provided citizens with more employment opportunities. From my perspective, this debate has an end and the simplest words with true facts will determine the American society attitude toward Wal-Mart Inc.



Strengths: I believe i did well in the sense that i mentioned that some people have taken a position toward either support or make critics against Wal-Mart. The reader understands from the paragraph that there is a debate taking place, im letting the audience know my position toward the topic and letting inferred with a general idea how can i support it.

Weaknesses: I think that i have to be more direct in my thesis, mentioning an argument toward the current issue could be a good idea. My thesis is not clear i thought i could let it open so the reader could have a little idea of what was coming next, i was trying to let the reader speculate within the topic what were my arguments , however, i believe its too general, so, that is not clear. I also did not mentioned where i got some information from, i need to write the source from where the fact is coming.

"Confronting Inequality" by Paul Krugman

Nowadays, in a society with a need of feeling superior and more powerful than others we have been segregated into socioeconomic classes. I found out this essay very informative and Mr. Krugman points out facts and issues about how inequality can affect us all in our common effort of progressing as individuals and members of a very "competitive" society. I quote competitive because with respect to Mr. Krugman's statements i could infered that before individuals could make their own place in a society with regard to their effort and education", however, now, " A society with highly unequal results is, more or less inevitably, a society with highly unequal opportunities, too". "One reason to care about inequality is the straightforward matter of living standards", our society have been segregated into many social, politic, economic and religious subgroups but two main classes have divided our society into two, from my perspective, we belong either to a working class or a rich class, with inequality, in other words the middle class has basically been eliminated, rich are becoming richer and poor, emarginated. With highly unequal opportunities people with less power in this case less money are limited when having options to choose from. In the book they say, i say and from specific the article Confronting Inequality by Paul Krugman i can highlight the phrase "another way in which inequality damages us: it corrupts our politics". For me it makes a lot of sense and at the same time no sense at all in the way that if politics are corrupted by a class with more power then laws will be made or reformed to their own benefit affecting in many positive ways the rich and in negative ways the poor respectively. If politics are in charge of making laws and organizing our society to benefit the society as a whole then there is no sense in having regulations that benefit a class more than an other. Why is there an interest in the benefit just in terms of individuality and not as a whole, a society? to respond to my own question the answer is simple and mentioned before, a need of power and a feeling of superiority over others.

Sunday, April 11, 2010