Intro and 1# body prph for essay #3

Although i am almost done with my essay i have only posted the intro and 1st body paragraph because i consider they are well written and ready to be Criticized. Im making corrections to 2nd paragraph and still working on the conclusion.

Obama toward economic growth and a more prosperous worker quality of life.

Many questions arise about how will Barack Obama and his government change America’s workers quality of life when inequality between employees and employers is so great and tends to be so advantageous in favor of the class with more power. Criteria must be set by the Obama administration in order to pass laws that protect workers’ rights and improve their quality of life. Many factors must be taken in consideration in the sense that over power and money the only mediation to assure employees rights been enforce, are laws, or at least that is what it is ethically expected to happen. The country must hold its breath and trust Obama’s promises of alleviating this incredible difficult struggle of the working class to survive in such competitive society. Employers have seen an illegal opportunity of boosting profits by denying employees rights such as lower wages than the minimum or jut not considering the work place safety conditions. Workers feel powerless, humiliated and their dignity have been stole in many situations where laws exist but there are no organizations that obligate employers to enforce workers rights. One of Barack Obama’s ideals to be promoted is the Employee Free Choice Act which establishes an efficient system that enables employees to form labor organization, fight for their rights and penalize unfair labor practices. Many employers are afraid of The Free Choice Act proposal been passed by the government because with it the indelible impression of someone fighting for the employee’s right will be inevitable.

Obama has promise in his campaign to raise the minimum wage, index it to inflation and increase the earned income tax credit to make sure that full time workers earn a living wage that allows them to raise their families and pay for basic needs. In the Book “They Say, I say” by Gerald Graff, Cathy Birkenstein and Russel Durst (Pg 360), Obama Clarifies in his speech “A More Perfect Union” how by investing in education, work force development and most important of all transforming our society into a society where inclusiveness prevails we can find a solution to our economic crisis. A country with no class barriers, a greater equality in terms of opportunities and inclusiveness, with it I mean not letting the working class fall behind, we as a community can resurge with a lot more strength and with experience remember and learn from our mistakes. ARRA stands for American Recovery and Reinvestment Act which is a $787 million economic stimulus to recover the country from a worldwide recession. The Act will save or create 3.5 million new jobs, make critical investments in our infrastructure and give 95 percent of working Americans a tax cut, (http://www.barackobama.com/issues/economy/). In a Washington Post Interview to Barack Obama he stated that “the three most important things to promote economic growth and prosperity would be long-term investments into American infrastructure to create more high wage jobs, to fight against trade agreements that undermine American competitiveness, like CAFTA, Act that have been so damaging to the American worker. Finally, support the tax cuts for low and middle income families and work to make them permanent in a fiscally responsible way.” Barack Obama, interview by The Washington Post. American workers have been extremely impacted by technology, labor unions and immigration during this short period of Obama’s administration. It is nearly impossible to stop immigrants entering the U.S; beyond been illegal it would cause a dramatic plummet in the American Economy. Despite the fact that many immigrant workers contribute to the economic national growth, it is also true that immigrants illegally working are taking jobs that would have been able for many unemployed Americans; In addition no taxes at all are been paid by this workers money that promotes and pays for the community as a whole needs. A drastic change must be done, either to legalize immigrant worker so they can legally work and pay taxes or enforce in a more disciplinary way immigration legislations.

Essay # 2 paragraph

This is a body paragraph that i have chosen from my Essay # 2. It talks about inequality based on the essay "Confronting Inequality" from Paul Krugman. I have supported my ideas with two main sources: 'Who built the pyramids" from the book Working by Studs Terkel and the film "Born Rich" Directed by Jamie Johnson. Here i express my ideas and state some facts about how inequality affects us all regarless classes and status, moreover, i in depth talk about how do members of a society interact in their struggle to move from one socioeconomic class to another.

How can people move up socially if they are not on an equal playing field to begin with? It is a fact that inequality is an abstract derivative of a constant will for domination. Inequality will always exist, it is the most used method to remark or point out which social, economic and political classes are predominant. Inequality also maintains classes where they are, it does not prevent social mobility in a total way, but it makes easier for upper classes to control and make as hard as possible for lower classes to make a step forward. Nowadays a greater inequality is more common in our society, class mobility have been limited not in the sense of having liberty, a life or a pursuit for happiness but in the sense that people in power have given themselves the right to narrow down opportunities regardless any individual’s effort or discipline. Comparing statistics of unemployment rate for men between African Americans and White, we can notice that there is a huge gap; inequality is a strong factor that directly affects this situation. Even with a degree African Americans unemployment rate is almost double the rate of white men and the same happens with men with less than high school, unemployment rate for black with less than high school is 24.2% and 13.8 for white, with a college degree is 8.4% for black and 4.4% for white, from Bureau of Labor Statistics. This demonstrates that there are not equal opportunities being offered to students, in effect to minorities, and in this field, race. In the film Born Rich directed by Jamie Johnson member of the Johnson & Johnson family he says, “ I live in a country that everyone wants to believe is a meritocracy, we wanna think that everyone earns what they have, i guess that makes you feel better, keep telling yourself that, it doesnt work for me anymore. I know my family gives away millions of dollars each year to charity, but how does that exactly level the plain field, i mean, what did a do to earn the kind of money ill own at midnight tonight. All I did was inherited.” In this phrase Jamie Johnson affirms that inequality can’t be avoided it is kind of part of human nature competency; however, inequality in great proportions should be controllable and avoidable in the sense of providing equal opportunity to everyone. The most important issue is how everyone can have equal opportunity if we are competing in wide different ranges and fields.

I think i did well in the sense that i started my paragrapgh with a rhetorical question which hooks the reader to keep getting interested in my essay. Also i gave statistics as proof of inequality in the opportunities of jobs given to graduated students in our society. Finally i support my idea by comparing it to the experience lived by Jamie Johnson in the film Born Rich.

I really dont know how to improve my essay, if i knew how to do it, it would have been like that.However, i am open to new ideas, and consider my classmates suggestions. Thank you for helping me improve my way of writing!

A paragraph from my draft, Essay # 1

Below i have my whole Introduction paragrapgh and at the end of it i have mentioned what i believe are my strengths and weaknesses and how i can improve or make more striking my introduction.

For the majority of companies, a well defined vision and mission is crucial for a future profitability success. The issue that concerns the most is the idea of maximizing a company’s profit regardless any moral or ethical consideration. Wal-Mart Company has become one of the most powerful retailers and private employers in The United States. Many disputes have emerged from the media causing controversy in the American society, in a specific field, Wal-Mart’s Customers or potential targets. Some people say that Wal-Mart is a company that has always been careless about its employee’s rights; with facts some support what they say. For example, Wal-Mart employees are forced to sign a pre employment agreement as a condition of accepting a job. This agreement requires employees to give up many rights as to bring a lawsuit against the employer for anything wrong done to the employee by the employer. It is a legal and an ingenious way to prevent a company in this case Wal-Mart, from any situation that can lead to a lawsuit. However, from my personal opinion, looking at it from a moral perspective not a right decision to be taken. On the other hand, some people say that Wal-Mart has become more than a convenient retailer super store for its consumers, with such “everyday low prices”, has also provided citizens with more employment opportunities. From my perspective, this debate has an end and the simplest words with true facts will determine the American society attitude toward Wal-Mart Inc.

Strengths: I believe i did well in the sense that i mentioned that some people have taken a position toward either support or make critics against Wal-Mart. The reader understands from the paragraph that there is a debate taking place, im letting the audience know my position toward the topic and letting inferred with a general idea how can i support it.

Weaknesses: I think that i have to be more direct in my thesis, mentioning an argument toward the current issue could be a good idea. My thesis is not clear i thought i could let it open so the reader could have a little idea of what was coming next, i was trying to let the reader speculate within the topic what were my arguments , however, i believe its too general, so, that is not clear. I also did not mentioned where i got some information from, i need to write the source from where the fact is coming.

"Confronting Inequality" by Paul Krugman

Nowadays, in a society with a need of feeling superior and more powerful than others we have been segregated into socioeconomic classes. I found out this essay very informative and Mr. Krugman points out facts and issues about how inequality can affect us all in our common effort of progressing as individuals and members of a very "competitive" society. I quote competitive because with respect to Mr. Krugman's statements i could infered that before individuals could make their own place in a society with regard to their effort and education", however, now, " A society with highly unequal results is, more or less inevitably, a society with highly unequal opportunities, too". "One reason to care about inequality is the straightforward matter of living standards", our society have been segregated into many social, politic, economic and religious subgroups but two main classes have divided our society into two, from my perspective, we belong either to a working class or a rich class, with inequality, in other words the middle class has basically been eliminated, rich are becoming richer and poor, emarginated. With highly unequal opportunities people with less power in this case less money are limited when having options to choose from. In the book they say, i say and from specific the article Confronting Inequality by Paul Krugman i can highlight the phrase "another way in which inequality damages us: it corrupts our politics". For me it makes a lot of sense and at the same time no sense at all in the way that if politics are corrupted by a class with more power then laws will be made or reformed to their own benefit affecting in many positive ways the rich and in negative ways the poor respectively. If politics are in charge of making laws and organizing our society to benefit the society as a whole then there is no sense in having regulations that benefit a class more than an other. Why is there an interest in the benefit just in terms of individuality and not as a whole, a society? to respond to my own question the answer is simple and mentioned before, a need of power and a feeling of superiority over others.